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①答えになっているか？
Write an essay on the given TOPIC.
TOPIC: Is a worldwide ban on weapons of mass destruction an attainable goal?
②指示通りに書いているか？
・Give THREE reasons to support your answer.
・Structure: introduction, main body, and conclusion
・Suggested length: 200-240 words
・Write your essay in the space provided on Side B of your answer sheet.
Any writing outside the space will not be graded.
③話のつじつまは合っているか？
④英文の質はどうか？（文法、単語の使い方、綴りミスなど）
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Drawing attention from among world countries is whether or not a worldwide ban on weapon of mass destruction is an attainable goal.
In my opinion, it’s an ideal goal but it is impossible for us to attain a worldwide ban on weapon of mass destruction.
I’d like to explain this cause with three reasons in this essay.
First of all, there are lots of conflicts in the world even now.
Bosnia and Herzegovina, Israel and Palestine are cases in a point.
They won’t give up weapons of mass destruction to extend their own territories.
Secondly, super powers such as U.S.A, Russia and China are using their nuclear weapons as a deterrent skillfully.
In other words, they use nuclear weapons as a tramp card towards other countries in international negotiations.
Unless they rectify this attitude, weapons of mass destruction won’t disappear from the world.
Finally, international world situation is becoming tense recently.
Despite the unprecedented meeting with America, North Korea doesn’t want to disclose its nuclear facilities and can’ be open-minded to the world.
In this situation, other haves can’t discard their weapons of mass destruction.
I’d like to emphasize again, lots of conflicts in this world, using nuclear weapons as a tramp card and current world situation are three reasons why I think that a worldwide ban on weapon of mass destruction is an unattainable goal. (226 words)
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