英検1級道場－2016-3英作文の採点で疑問が残ります
元受講生が書いてくれました。
Write an essay on the given TOPIC.
Give TWO reasons to support your answer.
Structure: introduction, main body, and conclusion
Suggested length: 120 - 150 words
Write your essay in the space provided on Side B of your answer sheet.
Any writing outside the space will not be graded.
Agree or disagree: More needs to be done to improve public safety
POINTS
●Accident
●Crime
●Food
●Technology
A growing concern in public society is the notion that “More needs to be done to improve public society”. I agree that we need to do more than now to improve public society. I would like to explain my opinion with two reasons in this essay.
First, because of this corona pandemic time, as a working from home custom is becoming normal, cyber net crimes are increasing. We should improve our computer security system more toughly in order not to steal private information.
Second, as the number of days when we stay at home increases, we tend to store foods in a refrigerator more than necessary. For example, a lot of food poisoning cases happen around Japan in this time. Foods that expires their validity should be discarded soon for public hygiene.
For these above reasons, I agree with the slogan, “More needs to be done to improve public safety”.
(150 words)
